Fallen

December 12th, 2004 - 22:14 | 6 comments

I sat down with the intention of writing a short story, and instead I ended up with this:

With meadows of light and dead stars in her eyes
She clawed at the night and fell into the sky
Too young to be wise and with decades unspent
In the streets of the city her cry of repent
The fallen are many when god charms the young
A weaving of wonder, and sanity spurned
Too steady the nerve of those worst placed to lead
A faith-scythe drops blood into furrows of seed
Send forth your young into clouds of crossed-poison
Their crossroads a dirt track, their avenue chosen
Perfection fights nature with Man incidental
Brings shame at a failure with hope detrimental
She’d sink to the ground when cowed by His gaze
But don’t expect help from mysterious ways
Seabound she tumbled, then a speck in the swell
Her last breath a tonic to send her to hell
Controllers would preach of the state of humanity
But in souls of pure passion a spark of depravity
Fight a river of sin! the holy words teach
But by a hand of a carer the embankment is breached
For bridges have watchers and all-seeing lenses
Created by science, they man the defenses
The waves part through physics and fighting the current
Man lunges and snatches the lost from the torrent
A whisper of logic, the scent of the sure
Can bring down the towers and flush out the sewer
What faith-based morality sent into despair
Rose from the deep with the truth in her stare

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6 Responses to “Fallen”

1 Simon Dec 13th, 2004 at 2:29 am

hmm, I sense a purpose in that
So, do we get to see some authors notes along side that? An insight into the actual ideas behind the words. Or do we have to put up with some English teachers passed down views which may merely note the coincidental?
2 Nodster Dec 13th, 2004 at 4:27 pm

wow! =)

… says it all really.
3 Lil Dec 14th, 2004 at 10:44 pm

*impressedness* =D
4 tazmania Dec 15th, 2004 at 3:14 am

i really like it, although many metaphors of death etc.. it flows really well. i think you should write more andrew
5 Krypto Dec 18th, 2004 at 6:27 pm

Thanks for the kind words I won’t put up explanations of each part as I think that people should apply their own interpretations; meaning is totally subjective.
6 Simon Dec 18th, 2004 at 7:43 pm

Thats nice to know. I seem to recall complaints from people doing English that they weren’t allowed their own opinions on others works.

OTOH, damn! All this thinking for myself, thats a real pain in the arse.

The reason I asked was to try and answer the age old question - were English lessons a load of bullshit? See, I remember having every few words analysed to having numerous hidden themes which all overlapped and intertwined along with drawing parallels to the time in which a piece had been written, all happily combining to promote a consolidated stance on some issue or other. My opinion, however, was that some guy had a general theme, concocted a few good lines and the rest was filler which tied in with the theme and the pace of the piece. Any multilayered imagery was just a happy coincidence for other people to make careers out of.

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